I love this one. You really get a feel for the realness of the world. This is a problem you see with a lot of other fantasy writers: they try to explain their world to you. SHOW DON'T TELL, DAMMIT! The only other story I got this feeling from was The Failed Cities Monolouges. I demand more short stories after Making the Cut is done!
    That was so funny, with the eyes on the breasts scene.

The irony is that this one has more "telling" than just about any other story in the setting. The reason I think it works is because we're getting a walking tour in between all the exposition. :) Well, that and the fact that Michael is almost as clueless about the city as the reader is, which makes it easy to identify with him.

> I demand more short stories after Making the Cut is done!

I plan to deliver more short stories on an intermittent basis while Making the Cut is running. I'll release them as bonus episodes during the off-weeks. I definitely have more stories to tell after Making the Cut is finished, but I don't know yet which ones will be short stories and which ones will be longer.

Thanks for the feedback!

I stumbled onto MCP on iTunes recently, and first let me say that I am a big fan; the stories and imaginative and fun.  As a writer myself, I find that it is really helpful when readers are brutally honest with me so that I can grow as a writer.  So, please don't take offense at this, but there was one thing that took away from my reading experience that is too easy to fix for me not to point it out: there are a lot of cliches in here.  Hand shake "like a vice" and "turning beet red" with embarassment are a couple examples that spring to mind.  Just a little constructive criticism.  Congrats on your success and I am happy I found MCP; I look forward to catching up to the newest stories/chapters!

Jason

Thanks for the feedback, Jason! I wrote Welcome to the City waaaay back in 2001, so I'm not surprised there are some areas that have room for improvement. :) Art is never finished, only abandoned...